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Re: [NOVEL] Phantom Sanctuary: Sins of the Savior
« Reply #75 on: September 21, 2010, 03:07:41 pm »
Chapter 3 done!

Please know that these are COMPLETELY different Chapters than before.
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Re: [NOVEL] Phantom Sanctuary: Sins of the Savior
« Reply #76 on: September 21, 2010, 03:13:58 pm »
Downloading for later read ^^

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Re: [NOVEL] Phantom Sanctuary: Sins of the Savior
« Reply #77 on: September 21, 2010, 03:58:38 pm »
Thanks, DJ. :D

@Everyone else: No one else is gonna read it? :c
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Re: [NOVEL] Phantom Sanctuary: Sins of the Savior
« Reply #78 on: September 21, 2010, 03:59:54 pm »
Something I worry about is that some people might not check this sub-forum for the book but rather for the game so it can be kinda hidden from them. Maybe you should move the topic in misc discussion. Idk. Also school is an issue x.x

EDIT: You might want to PM geekboy because he was very interested, if I remember, but unfortunately he has limited computer access
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Re: [NOVEL] Phantom Sanctuary: Sins of the Savior
« Reply #79 on: September 22, 2010, 07:19:52 pm »
Chapter 4 done!
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Re: [NOVEL] Phantom Sanctuary: Sins of the Savior
« Reply #80 on: September 22, 2010, 07:32:04 pm »
I should start reading this...

I'm putting this into a Flashbook to read on my TI-84. ;)


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Re: [NOVEL] Phantom Sanctuary: Sins of the Savior
« Reply #81 on: September 22, 2010, 07:32:32 pm »
Very nice!
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Re: [NOVEL] Phantom Sanctuary: Sins of the Savior
« Reply #82 on: September 22, 2010, 07:32:57 pm »
I haven't read 4 yet, but 1-3 look sweet.

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Re: [NOVEL] Phantom Sanctuary: Sins of the Savior
« Reply #83 on: September 22, 2010, 07:35:45 pm »
Thanks, Sir. :)

Also, don't be afraid to give some advanced critique! Every comment makes the book better! :D
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Re: [NOVEL] Phantom Sanctuary: Sins of the Savior
« Reply #84 on: September 22, 2010, 07:39:27 pm »
Chapter 2, page 2, halfway down:
"Why can we have a quiet run?" should be "When can we have a quiet run?" or "Why can't we have a quiet run?"

Chapter 2, Page 3, near top:
"No, we can't.//" Why the slashes?

Chapter 3, Page 2, last sentence should be indented

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Re: [NOVEL] Phantom Sanctuary: Sins of the Savior
« Reply #85 on: September 22, 2010, 07:53:22 pm »
Thank you, Sir.
I'm using WordPad, so I may not catch everything. :P
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Re: [NOVEL] Phantom Sanctuary: Sins of the Savior
« Reply #86 on: September 23, 2010, 05:57:27 pm »
*bump*

Chapter 5 done!
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Re: [NOVEL] Phantom Sanctuary: Sins of the Savior
« Reply #87 on: September 23, 2010, 05:59:43 pm »
w00t

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Re: [NOVEL] Phantom Sanctuary: Sins of the Savior
« Reply #88 on: September 23, 2010, 05:59:53 pm »
* DJ Omnimaga saves this on his comp.

When you have many chapters you should maybe put them in one zip file somewhere so it is easier for people to download ^^

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Re: [NOVEL] Phantom Sanctuary: Sins of the Savior
« Reply #89 on: September 23, 2010, 06:04:57 pm »
I shall. :)
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