Author Topic: FF:ROS - The Story - Discussion (Read 8194 times)

josephmarin · « **on:** April 19, 2007, 09:56:00 am »

Please tell me what you think of the story so far ^_^ Feel free to make comments, suggestions, ask questions, or tell me it sucks. Constructive criticism will help, no matter how insignificant it may be.

Delnar_Ersike · « **Reply #1 on:** April 19, 2007, 10:27:00 am »

It is a bit clich

josephmarin · « **Reply #2 on:** April 19, 2007, 10:34:00 am »

Mm, good point. I'll think about other interest-capturing openings. And of course I know what red herrings are =P I know exactly what you're talking about, too. But, I must say, you're assuming that the opening has something to do with the main problem. I can't divulge too much info, but when considering my writings, its usually good to keep in mind that things arent always how they appear. But I will look into the intro. Dreams are rather clich

dinhotheone · « **Reply #3 on:** April 25, 2007, 01:35:00 pm »

yeah, dreams are a bit cliche, you could always try an intro like in eragon where the main character isnt actually noticing it (the dream part) but then events from it affect him so YOU know whats happening but he doesnt. idk, have you read eragon? try reading the intro somewhere, actually just read it all, then read the sequel then wait for the final book and read that, they're real good.

Delnar_Ersike · « **Reply #4 on:** April 25, 2007, 03:03:00 pm »

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QUOTE (dinhotheone @ 25 Apr, 2007, 19:35)

yeah, dreams are a bit cliche, you could always try an intro like in eragon where the main character isnt actually noticing it (the dream part) but then events from it affect him so YOU know whats happening but he doesnt. idk, have you read eragon? try reading the intro somewhere, actually just read it all, then read the sequel then wait for the final book and read that, they're real good.

Don't...even...mention...that...stupid...intro!!! :flame:

It ruins the mystery when the dragon egg pops out of nowhere when Eragon was hunting. It also ruined the meeting of Arya in the jail because you automatically know who the elf is when she is first seen by Eragon!

IMO, I like the intro of the first Harry Potter book: it gets you thinking about what happened before the story and why Harry is so important.

dinhotheone · « **Reply #5 on:** April 26, 2007, 04:22:00 am »

well you understand what i mean tho, an intro that doesnt have the main character included or in harry potter's case, conscious. so you know more than the main character

josephmarin · « **Reply #6 on:** July 11, 2007, 12:25:00 am »

I suppose I could re-write it. After all, looking back on it, it does need a rewrite. I'm also open to plotlineand miscellaneous other suggestions. lay it on me, man, i need inspiration, and fast...the 16th draws near!

josephmarin · « **Reply #7 on:** September 23, 2007, 05:34:00 pm »

Ok, so here's a brief update. I've gotten to chapter 2 on the story. Hopefully I can get on tomorrow and post it in the story section. I haven't been working on the actual game cos i've been busy with gtting done here at job corps. So far I'm 51% done ^_^;

DJ Omnimaga · « **Reply #8 on:** September 23, 2007, 06:15:00 pm »

awesome to hear sonata! Glad to see you again

. I can't wait to see screenshots when you come back for good

btw what do u do at job corps?

josephmarin · « **Reply #9 on:** October 12, 2007, 03:28:00 pm »

Desktop Publishing. Things have been kinda slow though, so no new progress =(

DJ Omnimaga · « **Reply #10 on:** October 12, 2007, 03:50:00 pm »

aaah i see, I hope you like the job a bit at least. I can't wait until FFROS resumes tho

Jon · « **Reply #11 on:** October 12, 2007, 05:41:00 pm »

Dude i totally got a tilemapper you can use for this!

josephmarin · « **Reply #12 on:** October 13, 2007, 09:41:00 am »

ooo, groovy ^_^ got any sprites? I sure could use some....

DJ Omnimaga · « **Reply #13 on:** October 13, 2007, 11:01:00 am »

josephmarin · « **Reply #14 on:** October 26, 2007, 03:25:00 pm »

Ooh, i like those. Well, since I'm 74% complete, I can begin working more on FFROS.

Author Topic: FF:ROS - The Story - Discussion (Read 8194 times)

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